What are scales what is keeping things consistent what is making stuff that doesn't sound like ass

I wish I had a composer friend I could call in for assistance. Well, actually, I have three, but one is busy, one's kind of a douche, and the other is in a bad mood that she said would take two days to expire.

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Ugggh I should really just commission one of them (not the douche) but I want to learn how to do it on my ownnnn

I'm trying to do the "look at an existing melody and mess with it accordingly" thing but it's not turning out so good

brb dying unceremoniously

Oh, this sounds better. I guess. For a given value of better.

It's bouncier than I expected and this is supposed to be a fairly deep song though. Maybe I should try reducing the tempo...?

That helped, but the curious thing is that it sounds... kind of like Broken Moon. O_o Buh?

I THINK I FIXED IT though it probably still sounds like shit

Hah! I think I got something decent out of it. Kind of. I'm only two lines in though so beh.